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Some people say newspapers are the best source of news, but others say that the Internet is better. Discuss bath these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people say newspapers are the best source of information but others say that the
Internet
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 is better. discuss both these views and give your own opinion. There is a debate over how the community can be conscious of the information.
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 some saying that paper are the best way for newsreaders,
with
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some
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that
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internet
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 is
optimal
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 way. In spite of the fact that
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 paper
bring
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 more dependable information, I believe that
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Internet
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 is reasonably the best option. On the one hand, the
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 is the best option to check reporters , since it has-necessitate contemporary facts.
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, it can be personalized for the readers, by accessing social sites
according to
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 their own preferences.
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, If something bad happens, it will spread immediately across the networks.
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 it is convenient and immediate, and it is
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 an affordable option to stay informed, as it charges no emolument. To give an instance, someone interested in parliamentary proceedings can selectively choose these cases and read them.
On the other hand
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, the newspaper provides a number of advantages, some prefer the periodical
instead
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due to
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 the fact that must be sold with honesty and trustworthiness. Every article goes through a number of checking processes, Before being sold, a product must pass the scrutiny of numerous agents and journalists.
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, there were some fake statements about the new rules and regulations circulating worldwide networks. Many companies related to the government and reporters checked all sources and released verified narrations, which cleared up all misinterpretations to the community.
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, some communities are in favour of newspapers to get clearly defined narratives. To summarize what has been stated so far, even if a paper reports to inform society of reliable and true facts, I will strongly oppose
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this
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 using the network,
such
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 as it gives me inexpensive access.

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Remember to clearly outline your main points in the introduction. It helps in guiding the reader throughout the essay.
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You have presented both sides of the argument, which is essential for a discursive essay.
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You provided relevant examples to support your points, showing clear engagement with the topic.

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