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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.(Anelya1)

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.(Anelya1)
The presented two maps illustrate roadway connections to a city hospital in the years between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the area of
city
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the city
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 hospital was reconstructed and
also
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 extended in
the
Correct article usage
apply
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size, in order to it
was
Verb problem
apply
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convenient for patients over the given time period. First of all, the 6 bus
stop
Fix the agreement mistake
stops
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 along the clinic
road
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 replaced by two
roundabout
Change to a plural noun
roundabouts
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in
Change preposition
on
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 the same street in 2010.
However
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, on the west of
this
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road
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 was set up a new larger in size bus station for the same time recorded.
Subsequently
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, on the east of
this
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 route, where car park was for both staff and clients, divided into two areas.
Firstly
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, car parking for staff remained in the position
while
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parking
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the parking
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 lot for clients was relocated to the east of the Ring
road
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, for reasons that it was comfortable for both categories of people.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 the location of the city hospital and Ring
Road
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 remained untouched over the same time frame from 2007 to 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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