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Some think newspapers are the best method for reading the news while others think other media is better. Consider the arguments from both aspects of this possible debate, and reach your own opinion.

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Some
people
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 believe that
newspapers
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 are the best way to read about what has happened in the world recently,
whereas
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 others think other
media
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 are better. There are valid opinions on both sides, which I will consider now. On the one hand, opponents of
newspapers
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 argue that the readers could stay updated with the
news
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 just from their smartphones and
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 is efficient for the
people
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 because they can read the
news
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 anytime and anywhere they would like.
Furthermore
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, the delayed
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 and environmental impact from its print production would make
people
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 leave the traditional
newspapers
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. As printing
newspapers
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 requires a lot of paper and ink, it leads to deforestation and pollution. So, many
people
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 are focused on sustainability because of other
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 as website
news
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 which do not have the same environmental impact.
On the other hand
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, proponents believe that
newspapers
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 are a good way to read information because of their credibility, through high reporting standards and investigative journalism for delivering in-depth and comprehensive
news
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.
Newspapers
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 will give the
news
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 more reliability than other
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 because the reporters have some time to report the
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 and they will cross-check the issues first before writing the information.
To sum up
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,
while
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 it is true that
newspapers
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 have credibility and reliability, it seems true that the use of
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 as a means of reading will cause some substantial drawbacks in the future.
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, I firmly believe that using other
media
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 for reading the
news
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 would be a better option in
this
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 era.
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task achievement
The essay provides a balanced discussion of both perspectives but can be further improved by incorporating more specific examples to strengthen the points made. Including data or real-world instances could enhance the relevance and clarity of the arguments presented.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is generally clear, but transitions between paragraphs can be smoother. Use linking phrases to connect ideas seamlessly and guide the reader through your argument.
introduction conclusion present
The essay effectively introduces the topic and concludes with a clear opinion, which shows good organizational skills.
logical structure
The coherence within paragraphs is strong, and each idea is well-explained and logically connected to the main topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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