The money given to help poor countries does not solve the problem of poverty, so rich countries should give other types of help instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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to help people
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why rich
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way of helping poor people .In my opinion,
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will help the government of these
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with the
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but,the government of the
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know how to use the
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will talk about how
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money
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poor
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. Giving
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for helping poor
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many things.In
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money
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has a big impact .
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rich
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can build many facilities ,which can bring
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in the
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university,
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said that most of the
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receive
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from other
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have been improved and be a rich
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with no poor people .

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly define your points and ensure they align with the thesis you present in your introduction. Try to develop your arguments fully in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the connection between ideas. Use linking words or phrases to ensure that ideas flow logically and coherently.
language
Pay attention to grammar and spelling, as they can impact the clarity of your writing.
content
You express a clear opinion on the topic, demonstrating engagement with the prompt.
examples
Your examples indicate some understanding of how foreign aid can affect economies, hinting at a relevant context.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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