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Band 5.5

An Australian friend is coming to visit you and it will be his/her birthday during the vist write a letter to your friend Say how you feel about the visit Suggest what you could do on his/her birthday Ask what your friend thinks of this idea

Dear Nancy, Hope you're doing awesome and life is treating you well! I'm on cloud nine since I found
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 you're visiting me next month. Just send me your itinerary so I can check your journey, and my cousin will receive you from the airport. I'm beyond excited to see you as it's been a hot minutes since we caught up with each other. I wish to spend all my time with you that's why I took
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 off for a month. As June 21 is your birthday, I want to make it more special for you. I've planned a small gathering and a present for you. What do you think if I invite our school friends as well? Anyway, hit me up when you get the chance. Take care and see you soon! Suman.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea more clearly. For instance, you might separate your excitement about the visit and the planning for the birthday into distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
You might elaborate a bit more on what activities you can plan for the birthday to make it more special. This would enhance your complete response.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is warm and friendly, which suits the purpose of writing to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
You effectively expressed your excitement about your friend's visit, creating a positive mood in your letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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