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The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart describes how much financial aid
that
Correct determiner usage
the
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 four nations
recieved
Correct your spelling
received
 and how these funds were spent in 2008 and 2018. The graph
depic
Correct your spelling
depicts
depict
 that
the
Correct article usage
apply
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organisation 1
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
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recieved
Correct your spelling
received
 0.6,
0.9,0.8
Correct word choice
and 0.9,0.8
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 billion
dollars
Use synonyms
 in 2008,2009,2010 and 2011 respectively.
The organisation
Correct article usage
Organisation
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 2 had
charity
Correct article usage
a charity
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 of 0.0014
trillion
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dollars
Use synonyms
 in 2008, 0.0015
trillion
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dollars
Use synonyms
 in 2009, 0.0024
trillion
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dollars
Use synonyms
 in 2010 and 0.0025
trillion
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dollars
Use synonyms
 in 2011. The third organisation gained 0.000015 million
dollars
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 in 2008, 0.000017 million
dollars
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 in 2009, 0.000014 million
dollars
Use synonyms
 in 2010 and 0.000015
millionsollars
Correct your spelling
million dollars
 in 2011.
Linking Words
Similarly
Add a comma
Similarly,
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 the amounts of organizations of 4 and 5 are presented. On comparing the data of the groups, in 2008 group 4
collect
Wrong verb form
collected
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least
Change the article
the least
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 amount,
while
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 group 3 collect
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
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.
Linking Words
Similarly
Add a comma
Similarly,
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 in 2009, firm 4 was on the lowest level and firm 3 was on top. In the third
continues
Replace the word
continuous
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 year
company
Fix the agreement mistake
companies
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 4 and 5 earned
same
Change the article
the same
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 amount
while
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 2 topped the chart. In 2011 institution 4
secure
Replace the word
secured
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 minimum funds
while
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 2 maximum. In conclusion, different corporations secure different
amount
Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
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 of funds but
at the end
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 of four
years
Add a comma
years,
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gourp
Correct your spelling
group
 two was on top,
while
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organization
Capitalize word
Organization
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 3 was able to maintain the stable
funs
Correct your spelling
funds
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "similarly, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, trillion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 4 times.
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