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The graph below shows the number of books bought from different sources in one European country since 2000 with a projection for 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books bought from different sources in one European country since 2000 with a projection for 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the number of
books
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 bought from different sources in a particular European country since 2000 with a projection for 2012.
Overall
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, over the period of 12 years, purchasing
books
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 at
supermarkets
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 became popular,
whereas
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 the sales volume of
bookshops
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 and the
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internet
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Internet
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 experienced a decline. In detail, in 2000,
books
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 from
bookshops
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 were predominantly at 170
million
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, with
supermarkets
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 and the
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internet
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Internet
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 accounting for 130 and 110
million
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, respectively. By 2004, the figures for
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 dramatically soared to 140
million
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, overtaking
supermarkets
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 (132
million
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).
Bookshops
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' figures consistently dropped from 160
million
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 in 2004 to 140
million
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 in 2008. Meanwhile, figures for
supermarkets
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,
in contrast
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, continuously rose to match
bookshops
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.
Similarly
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, the number of
books
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from
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on
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 the
internet
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 grew considerably to 150
million
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, surpassing the other two sources. By 2012,
supermarkets
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 were expected to dominate in
books
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 (160
million
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), slightly surpassing
bookshops
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 (155
million
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).
However
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,
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internet
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the internet
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 was projected to plummet sharply to merely 135
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, supermarkets, bookshops, internet, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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