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The table below shows social and economic indicators for three countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for three countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the relationship between social and economic indicators in three different countries,
such
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 as
Canada
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,
Japan
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, and
Peru
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,
according to
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 United Nations evidence in 1994.
Overall
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,
Canada
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 and
Japan
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 showed similar trends in both economic and social aspects.
In contrast
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, the data in
Peru
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 are significantly smaller than
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 countries. As can be seen, the annual earnings per person in
Japan
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 are the highest at 15760 dollars, after
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Canada
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, which has
income
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at
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 11100 US dollars.
Otherwise
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, the income in
Peru
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 is the lowest, just 160 dollars per character.
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, the longevity in
Canada
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 is 76 years, and the life span in
Japan
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 is greater than in
Canada
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 by two years.
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, the life expectancy at birth in
Peru
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 is merely 51 years. Daily energy per person in
Canada
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 is over 3300 calories, which is twice
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Peru
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Peru's
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 and higher than
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Japan
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Japan's
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, about 500 calories.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of mature people who can read in
Canada
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 and
Japan
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 is almost perfect (99%).
While
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 the number of adult literacy in
Peru
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 accounts for 68% of the total population.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, japan, peru with synonyms.
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