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Scientific developments in farming always bring major benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In recent years,
science
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 has played a big role in changing the way farming is done. Some people believe that scientific progress in agriculture always brings major advantages.
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 I agree that
science
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 has helped farming in many ways, I do not think the benefits are always guaranteed, and there can be some negative effects as well. On the one hand, scientific developments have made farming more efficient and productive.
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, modern machinery like tractors and harvesters can do the work much faster than people.
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 saves time and helps farmers grow more
food
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.
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, new types of seeds, known as genetically modified (GM) crops, can produce higher yields and resist pests or diseases. These changes are important in feeding the growing world population.
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,
science
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 has helped improve
food
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 quality and safety. Advances in irrigation, fertilisers, and crop protection mean that plants grow healthier and survive in difficult weather conditions.
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 can lead to better
food
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 security in poor or dry areas where farming is hard.
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, not all scientific changes are positive. Some people are concerned about the long-term effects of GM crops on health and the environment.
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, using a lot of chemical fertilisers and pesticides can harm the soil and pollute water sources. In many cases, small farmers cannot afford high-tech tools or expensive seeds, which can increase the gap between rich and poor farmers. In my opinion, scientific farming has many important benefits, especially in solving
food
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 shortages and improving farming techniques.
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, it is important to use
science
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 in a careful and balanced way to avoid damaging the environment or causing social problems. In conclusion,
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science
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 has brought many benefits to farming, I believe it is not always perfect. It can be very helpful, but we must
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 be aware of the possible risks and manage them wisely.

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Use linking words more often to connect your ideas and improve flow, like 'for example', 'however', and 'in addition'.
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The essay presents a clear opinion and addresses both sides of the argument effectively.
coherence and cohesion
The ideas are mostly well organized, making it easy for readers to follow your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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