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The chart below gives information about car ownership in households in the UK between 1951 and 2007

The chart below gives information about car ownership in households in the UK between 1951 and 2007
The line graph shows changing trends in
car
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ownership
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 in the UK from 1951 to 2007.
Overall
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,
car
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ownership
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 increased significantly during
this
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 period and there is an increasing trend for
households
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 to have more than one
car
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. In 1951,
car
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ownership
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 was uncommon in the UK, with only just over 10% of the population owning one
car
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 and approximately 2% of
households
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 owning
two
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cars
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.
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, the situation changed quite rapidly over the next 16 years and by 1967, approximately 45% of
household
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households
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 owned a
car
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 and just under 10% had
two
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cars
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. Over the next 40 years, from 1967 to 2007, single-
car
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 families remained relatively stable at around 45%.
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, the percentage of
households
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 without a
car
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 continued to fall, albeit slightly less sharply.
This
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 continued decline corresponded with increases in the
ownership
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 of multiple
cars
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, with owning
two
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cars
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 rising to just under 30% in 2007,
while
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 three or more
cars
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 accounted for just under 10%. Notably,
households
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 having
two
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cars
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 increased to a greater degree than three or more
cars
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 during
this
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 period, and the trend for three or more did not begin until
towards
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the end of the 1960s.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, ownership, households, two, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
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