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The chart below gives information about car ownership in households in the UK between 1951 and 2007

The chart below gives information about car ownership in households in the UK between 1951 and 2007
The line chart depicts the
percentage
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 of
household
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households
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 with no
car
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, one
car
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,
two
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cars
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, and three or more
cars
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 in the United Kingdom from 1951 to 2007.
Overall
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, it is immediately apparent that
car
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 ownership experienced an upward tendency,
whereas
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 families without
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car
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 had a
decending
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descending
 trend. Meanwhile, the highest
percentage
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 was no
car
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 ownership
on
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in
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 the first year of time measured. In 1951, the no-
car
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category
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 dominated the population
in
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by
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 85%,
while
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 only 15% owned a
car
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 or
two
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 and no people had three
cars
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 or more.
Additionally
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, between 1951 and 1975, there was a significant decrease
of
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in
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 the
percentage
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 of
household
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households
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 without a
car
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 and levelled off at 45%.
However
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, there was an enormous growth
of
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in
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 society with a
car
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, from just above one-tenth to nearly 44%.
Moreover
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, the
two
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cars
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category
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also
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 rose gradually to 10% and the number of people with more
cars
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 started to increase in the first period.
On
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 the second period, between 1975 and 2007, it was seen that the proportion of people without
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car
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a car
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 declined marginally, until it finished at just below a quarter.
In contrast
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, the
percentage
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 of the one-
car
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category
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 remained stable at 45% for 32 years.
In addition
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, the
two
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car
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 ownership underwent a moderate climb to almost 20%, from 10% to just below 30%,
while
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 the three-or-more-
cars
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category
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was slightly go
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 up as it ended at 9%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, car, two, cars, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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