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The given maps illustrate the differences between Westley town in contemporary and in 1815.

The given maps illustrate the differences between Westley town in contemporary and in 1815.
The given maps illustrate the differences between Westley
town
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 in contemporary and in 1815.
Overall
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this
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town
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have
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 fully shifted from where the economy focuses on agriculture into a large community.
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, the railway system played a main role in the development of
this
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town
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.
To begin
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 ,
while
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 in the north of the
town
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in
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on
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 the right side, it used to be the house which belonged to Lord Westley, it now transformed into the Red Lion and Leston Hotel;
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, the Vinton village and Lake Lenton were untouched over the period. Moving below to where used to be a Lenton Woods , it had flattened and now becomes a London housing estate. On the western side of
this
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 figure, the Coach Inn which is located
net
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 to the main road has been rebuilt into the sports centre and the Museum. Taking a look o the remaining parts of
this
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town
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, in the bottom left of the
town
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, all 5 large field areas had been removed in order to contruct the railway system which along Westley
town
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 from the North to the South,
in addition
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, the main road had expanded which main railway station and cinema were built in its side. As for the resident accommodation,
while
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 lots of houses have been renovated into modernised residential Areas which
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 business and shopping, the market square and
town
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 hall have been unchanged. In the centre of the
town
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, the church has later been replaced by the West Gate shopping centre

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "differences" in your introduction.
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