03 June 2025, The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year

03 June 2025, The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year
IELTS Writing Task Chart for 03 June 2025, The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year
The bar graph depicts the total number of employees in Australia
last
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year, broken down by gender and various employment.
Overall
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, the proportion of male employees was higher than female employees in almost all
type
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types
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of
job
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jobs
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despite clerical and
professionals
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. There was a massive gap in the total number of men and women who were tradespeople and who worked in the production sector,
which
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men
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women at 900 to 100 and 550 to 100, respectively.
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, in clerical work, there were more females with nearly 1000,
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males recorded at less than 900.
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, there was only a small gap of 50 people in
professionals job
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professional jobs
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with
female
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females
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led
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the portion.
Australian
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Australians
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who became managers
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dominated by males, accounting for threefold more than the opposite sex at 600. In semi-professionals
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mostly filled by males rather than females, recorded at just above 500 and 350 in each respective sex.
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, the number of men working as labourers stood at 400, 150 higher than that of women.

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