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The table below shows the worldwide market share of notebook computer manufacturers in the year 2006, 2007 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the worldwide market share of notebook computer manufacturers in the year 2006, 2007 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table compares the pattern of
market
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 share of notebook computers of different brands. The comparison is made between 2006 and 2007.
Overall
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, the percentage decreased for the majority of manufacturers
such
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 as Acer, Lenovo, Fujitsu-Siemens and Others.
However
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, there are a few anomalies like HP, Dell and Toshiba, where the percentage increased over the years. Throughout the years, HP managed to remain a
market
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 leader, with a rate of 31.4% in 2006 and 34% in 2007.
This
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 was a 2.6% improvement.
In contrast
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, Fujitsu-Siemens had the lowest
market
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 share, with 4.8% and 2.3% respectively in 2006 and 2007.
Moreover
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, the second highest amongst the 2 years was Other Brands in 2006 and Dell in 2007. The brands Acer and Lenovo saw a slight dip in their
market
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 share from 11.6% to 10.7% (Acer) and 6.6% to 6.2% (Lenovo).
On the other hand
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, Toshiba jumped by 1.1 % from 6.2% in 2006.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words market with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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