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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps show the layout of a specific bookstore in 2000 and now. By focusing on the current map, several changes become obvious.
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, the biggest section, Fiction, in 2000, has been dissected into
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four parts, and some other sections are
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currently
 allocated to those areas.
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, the hobbies corner has been removed now. Specifically, in terms of the facilities remained unchanged, the service desk and the corners for Travel and New
Books
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 are still located in the same position.
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, the three areas, involving Non-fiction, Cookery and Art, have been moved to the blanks which arose by making the Fiction corner smaller. In detail, the Art section is currently located
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 the left-top area next
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 new position of Cookery
books
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.
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, the area for the Non-fiction
books
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 is allocated at the bottom of the bookshelf for the Fiction
books
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 now. In comparison, there are the two facilities which can be found on the current map, and they are the table and cafe which are located
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 the left side of the Non-fiction corner and at the bottom of that table respectively. What is more, all sections are more widespread in the better balance, in terms of the current allocation.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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