It is often said that governements spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important? Do you agree or disagree?

Wildlife constitutes an important aspect of protecting the
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, it is the responsibility of
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to work on projects to ensure the protection of animals and other species that exist on the planet.
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, some people argue that regulating authorities should not spend too much money on the safeguarding of wild species. I completely disagree with
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and will explain my supportive ideas on the side of protecting forest species in the upcoming paragraphs. One of the first reasons to save wild creatures is that, like humans, all the creatures on
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planet are important, we should admire the creativity of nature,
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, it is the responsibility of
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to take the required steps to ensure their survival. The other biggest reason is that our
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is facing numerous alarming issues
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as global warming, the greenhouse gas effect, climate change and so on. The major reason behind all
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environmental issues is human interference with nature life
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as deforestation, loss of animal's natural habitats resulting in, endangered plants and animals etcetera. The existence of flora and fauna is required to maintain the ecological balance of the
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, indirectly, for the sake of human life, protecting wildlife is of utmost importance.
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, people argue that there are a lot of societal and economic issues
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as improving health and education standards, developing infrastructure, and reducing poverty and unemployment,
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,
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should invest funds in
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projects to uplift the living standards of people. But it is necessary to understand that if we do not have a clean
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to survive, if we are not able to provide clean air and water to our upcoming generations,
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how a good life without a substantial
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can be assured for the next generations
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, it requires very critical thinking to understand the significance of flora and fauna for human survival. In conclusion, I would wrap up my essay by saying that though other aspects that
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linked to human development necessitate the funding, we cannot ignore the protection of wildlife that indirectly but significantly impacts our lives,
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,
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' funding to save all natural creatures existing on the earth is required.

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Your introduction clearly states your position but could be more engaging with a hook to capture interest.
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While you provide valid points, adding one or two specific examples would strengthen your argument.
strength
You provide a clear opinion and structure your arguments logically.
strength
You make good connections between wildlife protection and human survival, showing your understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • governments
  • spend
  • money
  • projects
  • protect
  • wildlife
  • important
  • agree
  • disagree
  • balance
  • investing
  • benefits
  • eco-tourism
  • health
  • natural
  • areas
  • biodiversity
  • food security
  • environmental balance
  • ignoring
  • extinction
  • species
  • ecosystems
  • resources
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