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Band 4.5

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads To what extent are you agree or disagree with tis statement?

In recent years, some
peple
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people
think
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 that
the
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governments
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 should prioritize
in
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apply
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railways
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 more than roads. The writer of
this
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 essay totally disagrees with
this
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 suggestion
due to
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 the inconvenience of
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train
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the train
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 and
a
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the
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 large amount of
money
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 spent on the station. One notable reason
of
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for
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this
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 statement is the inconvenience for individuals to use the
train
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to
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for
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 transport. In the modern day, to adapt to
such
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 a busy world, citizens have to travel a lot in their
town
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towns
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,
city
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cities
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, or even in their countries, so
that
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the individuals need means of transportation that can
access to
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meet
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 their
requirement
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requirements
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.
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, to travel by
train
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,
the
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folks have to buy a ticket,
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and waiting
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waiting
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wait
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 a long time to get on the
train
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 making them lower ability to adapt to the world.
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, in Vietnam, to travel by
a
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train
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, individuals have to wait an average time of 3 hours to
go
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get
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 to their destination.
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, the
governments
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 ought not to spend
money
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 on
railways
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 and
train
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 stations. Another significant factor
to
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in
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this
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 issue is that the expenditure to build
railways
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 is large. It cannot be
dennied
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denied
 that to produce
such
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 a large amount of
railways
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cover
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covering
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 the whole
countries
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country
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, the
governments
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 should use a lot of materials
such
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 as steel or iron which are costly.
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, the expense needed to
aford
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afford
 will significantly increase which
mean
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means
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 the
governments
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 must spend a fortune to construct
railways
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 and
train
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station
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stations
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 making the budget of the countries
will
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apply
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dramatically reduced. In conclusion, the
governments
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 should not spend
money
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 on the
railways
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due to
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 the inconvenience of travelling by
train
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 and the large amount of
money
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 spent on them.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your ideas are clearly linked and flow well. Use more linking words like 'however' or 'moreover' to connect your points.
task achievement
Try to include more specific examples or explanations to support your main points more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammar and vocabulary mistakes to improve clarity and readability.
task achievement
You presented a clear opinion in your introduction, stating that you disagree with prioritizing railways.
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You provided reasons for your disagreement, which is a good way to support your argument.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear conclusion that summarizes your main points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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