IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Some countries pay extremely high salaries to people. Some people believe that the country must not do that and make a limit for the salaries. Do you agree or disagree?

Worldwide
in
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apply
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different areas have unique pay
system
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systems
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,
it
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which
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 totally
depend
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depends
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 on each
country
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country's
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 economy.
Pay
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The pay
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 system
have
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has
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 its own
importanies
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importance
 in every
humans
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human
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 life
beacuse
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because
 without
salary
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a salary
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 no one wants to work. It depends on the level or position of
person
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the person
a person
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what
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and what
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 they are getting as salary,
still
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still,
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 some percentage people think that everyone should have almost equal pay which is not possible.

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task response
Try to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. It helps the reader understand your viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea and clear supporting sentences. This will improve understanding.
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Provide specific examples or reasons to support your points. This makes your argument stronger and more convincing.
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You have started discussing an important topic about salary systems and equality.
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You acknowledge that salary depends on many factors, which is a good point to make.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic inequality
  • civil unrest
  • motivation
  • productivity
  • brain drain
  • standard of living
  • societal well-being
  • tax revenues
  • public services
  • infrastructure
  • economic growth
  • consumer spending
  • meritocratic society
  • barrier to entry
  • diversity
  • innovation
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