In order for the world to be a 'greener' place, punishments and fines for environmentally unfriendly acts committed by individuals need to be more severe. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Recently, most countries have a policy that

protect

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forest

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forests

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, because it is essential to prevent

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global warming and

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the government

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decide

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punishments and fines

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acitivites

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activities

that

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greens

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, some people argue those punishments are not enough. I agree with

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opinion

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because people do not think about

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seriously.

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with, forests are precious for living things. Some animals

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trees

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and they use them for

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accomodation

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accommodation

. Once the number of

trees

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are decreasing

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, human

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can not get enough animals

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, it

protect

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our lives.

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mountain

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without

trees

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are dangerous

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land slide

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may occur

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because the ground

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mud and it easily moves.

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, it may destroy houses and human lives. To prevent these kinds of

disaster

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, we need to preserve forests.

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, individuals continue to destroy nature, so

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they do not understand the effect of

destrucion

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destruction

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it. In

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situation, we need to discuss

about

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the regulation. If people do not think about

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issue seriously and continue to

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, it is necessary to make punishments more heavy.

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, it is essential for us to cut

trees

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when we build houses.

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, authorities need to judge if the

acitivity

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activity

is important or not. In conclusion, it is difficult to decide whether it is illegal or not, but we need to address

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this

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environmental issue.

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coherence and cohesion

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coherence and cohesion

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coherence and cohesion

Your introduction gives a good overview of the main idea.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

232 words

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friendly
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countries
laws
pollution
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rules
consequences
serious
education
programs
teach
nature
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treatment
lower-income
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problem
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