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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. XX

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. XX
The bar chart illustrates the total number of international
students
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 pursuing studies in four nations in 2004 and 2012,
while
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 the table presents the percentage of international
students
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 relative to the student population in those countries during the same years.
Overall
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,
both
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total
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the total
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 number of international
students
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 and their percentage showed an increase, except for the proportion of foreign
students
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 in the USA, which levelled out. In the bar chart, the USA was the most popular country with 150,000
students
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 in 2004 and 250,000
students
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 in 2012.
In contrast
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, Canada had the lowest population of foreign scholars, with fewer than 70,000 in
both
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 years.
On the other hand
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,
both
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 the UK and Australia had just over 100,000 scholars in 2004, and by 2012, their numbers increased to nearly 200,000
students
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, with a slight difference between the two.
According to
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 the table, Australia had the largest proportion over the given period and the greatest increase, rising from 19% to 24%.
This
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 was followed by the UK (9% to 13%) and Canada (5% to 7%),
both
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 of which experienced moderate growth. Meanwhile, the USA stayed constant at 2%, making it the lowest share.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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