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Global warming is one of the biggest threat to our environment. What are the main cause of global warming, and what solutions cn be taken.

In
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 modern era, one of the main rising concerns is global warming. The excessive
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 of fossil fuels
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 as oil, coal, and natural gas,
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 significant contributions from human activities, plays a key role. In
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 essay, I will discuss the main causes of
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, suggest some solutions, and present my opinion.
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, many individuals are purchasing cars that consume large amounts of petrol and diesel, which releases carbon dioxide.
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 gas is trapped between the Earth and the sun and the carbon dioxide remains in the atmosphere causing air pollution and global warming.
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, in the USA, a growing number of people are buying SUVs and multiple vehicles and they are using extra fossil fuels. Because of that air pollution is high, is not only affecting the planet but human health as well. To address
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, the government should have strict rules and regulations
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 purchase cars and double the prices and taxes.
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, they can spread awareness and educate them about global warming, and climate change and small changes in their day-to-day life can contribute to saving the Earth.
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 as, they can
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 public transport, and for short distances, they can go walking or cycling. Another main reason is, deforestation and overpopulation, as you can see people are growing and individuals do not have a place to live.
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,
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 are cut down to build houses, roads, factories and ponds.
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this
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, many animals and species are disappearing. To tackle
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, authorities should ban deforestation plant new
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 and even introduce one-child policies. As an individual, we can
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 contribute by using sustainable transport, avoiding eating meat, and fish, recycling home waste food and eco-friendly products, switching off electricity, when we are not using them and planting
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.
To sum up
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, the government should control the excessive
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 of cars, save forests, and bring new policies to control the population and spread awareness. As individuals, we can plant
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, recycle household waste and
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 eco-friendly products.

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Make your introduction clearer. State the main points you will cover in simple terms.
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Ensure each main point is supported with enough detail and examples.
coherence and cohesion
Link your ideas more smoothly. Use clear connectors like 'firstly,' 'next,' and 'finally.’
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Vary your sentence structure to make your writing more interesting.
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You clearly identify the causes of global warming and suggest relevant solutions.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in understanding your overall argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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