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Some people think that the best way to run a business is within the family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of a family run business?

Few people feel that a
business
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 should be established within the family. I believe that there are some advantages
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 as having trust and loyalty in one another in the family
as well as
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 maintaining
business
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 sustainability and its legacy for long-term vision, and there are some disadvantages like lack of professionalism and poor or limited skills. On the one hand, whenever the family runs any
business
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, there is always both trust and loyalty between them. So, these two qualities are emotionally attached to each other in the family to make the
business
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 successful.
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, there are more chances to sustain the family
business
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 and its legacy because they want to carry forward the
business
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further
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 for the upcoming generations.
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, my neighbourhood family built their own pickle
business
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 in my local area where they earn 1 Million every year.
On the other hand
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, any
business
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 needs good experience and professionalism. In family
business
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, there is a lack of professionalism. To overcome these issues, a family should learn the
business
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 structure and
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 learning.
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, limited poor skills in
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 can lead to slowly destroying the family
business
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.
As a result
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, that
business
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 will not compete with other family businesses.
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, yesterday's "Times Of India" newspaper mentioned that Bihar's family lost their
business
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 because of their inadequate skills. In conclusion, the
business
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 within a family has both benefits
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 drawbacks.
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, people need to gain proper knowledge of the
overall
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business
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 to establish and make it successful. Especially, in a family
business
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, it has to take extra care of everything.

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Try to explain your ideas more clearly and in detail.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph flows smoothly to the next by using linking words.
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Include more examples to support your points.
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Your introduction clearly states advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
You present a good conclusion summarizing your main points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • loyalty
  • trust
  • communication
  • generational knowledge
  • long-term outlook
  • family traditions
  • stability
  • cost-effective
  • flexible payment arrangements
  • conflict
  • tensions
  • roles
  • diversity
  • external perspectives
  • innovation
  • adaptation
  • succession planning
  • instability
  • leadership
  • ownership
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