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The bar chart below shows the number of international tourists who visited five different countrie in the years 2010 and 2020

The bar chart below shows the number of international tourists who visited five different countrie in the years 2010 and 2020
The bar chart provides key information about the
number
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 of international
tourists
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 who visited
to
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France,
USA
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the USA
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, China, Italy and Australia between 2010 and 2020. The units are measured in numbers.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
number
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 of international
tourists
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 who visited
ti
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France had the highest figures,
while
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 the
number
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 of international
tourists
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 who visited
to
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Australia had the lowest. In general, there
was
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were
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 noticeable differences among the categories. In 2010, the
number
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 of international
tourists
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 to France recorded the highest
number
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 at around 76,
whereas
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 the
number
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 of
tourists
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 who visited
to
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Australia was lower at 30. By 2020, increased to 36. Meanwhile, the figures for

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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