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The graph below gives information on the numbers of particpants for a different activiities at one social centre in melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of particpants for a different activiities at one social centre in melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The graph illustrates the details of the
candidates
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 who participated in varied activities at one social centre in Melbourne between the
year
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 2000 to 2020.
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, it can be seen that the musical performances and table tennis activity have risen significantly.
On the contrary
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, amateur dramatics activity drastically dropped
at the end
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 , and the remaining two activities remained relatively constant throughout the
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 The musical performances had no
participants
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 in 2005, but they went up to 15
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 in the
year
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 2020.
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, table tennis had almost constant
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 around 16 to 20 between the years 2000 to 2010, and after that, it rose rapidly to 52
participants
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 in the
year
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 2020. The amateur dramatics activity had around 26
candidates
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 in 2000, and it went down till the
year
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 2020 around 4
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. The remaining film club and martial arts activities remained relatively constant around 63 and 46
candidates
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 from the
year
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 2000 to 2020.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words candidates, year, participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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