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ARE TRADITIONAL BOOKS BETTER THAN E-BOOKS. COMPARDE READING PRINTED BOOKS READING DIGITAL BOOKS. WHICH DO YOU PREFER AND WHY

Are daily
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book
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books
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 better than
e-books
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.
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 In
this
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i
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I
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 will discuss both sides of reading a weekly booklet and
e-album
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an e-album
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. Some people think that reading a digital
book
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 is easier , but I disagree with
this
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 statement. From my perspective, reading a traditional
book
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 is a kind of hands-on activity
that is
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 more flexible who want to feel the
book
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's pages.
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, my sister
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 on the smell of
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book
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books
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 and the feeling of flipping the pages.
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,
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 it may seem like it is harmful to the environment because of cutting the trees to get the paper.
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, traditional books are way more expensive than
e-books
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 because they require more supplies. Even though
,
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 it can be carried around everywhere you go because it doesn't need a battery , which
isonly
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only
 has
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e-books
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.
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,
e-books
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 are eco-friendly because it doesn't need to cut the trees to get hundreds of paper. If it has a battery,
then
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 you can enjoy reading everywhere. But, it can
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distract the attention because it is easier to scroll
your
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 phone. If you get a call from someone
who
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 you really care
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 eventually you may open the social apps directly. And you stop
read
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reading
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 and get the information from your head to call it a day.
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, the sight of the eyes gradually gets worse if someone reads at night a lot. Scientists discovered that if you read
e-books
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 , something like texts can be worse
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 eyesight. To wrap it up, reading paper books is harmful to the trees and more expensive , but if you love the feeling of reading books,
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 it is win deal. Virtually, if you like to read
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e-books
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e-books,
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 it'll worsen your eyesight but
slightly
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is slightly
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 friendly for
eco
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the eco
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 ecosystem. So it's up to you.

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state your opinion on which type of book you prefer. This will help readers understand your point of view right away.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. Try to start each paragraph with a sentence that states what the paragraph will be about.
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Use more examples to support your points. For instance, give more details on why traditional books are special to you or how e-books can be used in daily life.
coherence and cohesion
Check your sentence structure and try to use simpler sentences. This will make your writing clearer and easier to read.
task achievement
You included good points about both traditional books and e-books, showing that you understand the topic well.
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You expressed your personal opinion clearly, which is important in this type of essay.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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