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The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2000 and 2010, with projected sales for 2020.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2000 and 2010, with projected sales for 2020.
The bar chart illustrates how many people were interested in magazines in five different
countries
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 in 2000, 2010, and forthcoming in 2020.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the number of magazines sold in
country
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 D increases,
while
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 the other
countries
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 decrease.
In addition
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, the figures in
country
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 B are the largest, with
country
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 E being the smallest. In 2000, about 50% of
country
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 B had sold magazines, which made up the highest percentage among all
countries
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. Both
countries
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 A and C showed around 48% and 37% respectively,
whereas
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 the figures for
countries
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 D and E were slightly lower, at only 18% and 5% respectively. In 2010, there was an increase of 20% in the number of magazine sales in
country
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 D.
This
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 upward trend is projected to continue, reaching approximately 24% by 2020.
By contrast
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, the proportion of magazine sales in other
countries
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 dropped sharply by around 5%. Similar trend, the percentage dropped slightly in the forthcoming year by 2020.
Additionally
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, there was a fluctuation in
country
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 E by 2010,
then
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 a fall of 5% in 2020.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Increases
  • Decreases
  • Comparison
  • Significant
  • Projected
  • Sales
  • Economy
  • Digital Media
  • Impact
  • Cultural Factors
  • Analysis
  • Future Trends
  • Market Conditions
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