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The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014.

The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014.
The bar chart illustrates the contribution given to
six
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 of charity by one company between 2012 and 2024
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, the social welfare in
three
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years
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 was the highest of
six
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 different types
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 the arts in
three
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years
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was
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were
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 the lowest
in
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of
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six
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 different kinds. Social welfare was the highest in
six
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 different types of charity
with
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in
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2014
the
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being the
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highest
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highest,
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 was about 24
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percent
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, the second highest
in
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was in
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2012
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2012,
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 was 22
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and
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 the lowest of social welfare was about 16
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percent
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. Education in 2012 and 2014 had the same
rate
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with
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 about 8
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and
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 in 2013
was
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it was
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 the lowest
with
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 6
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percent
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. The environment in 2012 was the highest in
three
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years
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 of education
with
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 8
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, in 2014
did
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there were
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 not have a lot of changes
with
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 7
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and
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 in 2013
was
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it was
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 the lowest
with
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 5
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. The health in 2014 had the highest
rate
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 in
three
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years
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 9
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percent
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and
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 in 2012 and
2013
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2013,
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did
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there was
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 not have a lot of difference
of
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in
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 percentage
with
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 6 and 7
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respectively
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. If health
was
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 compared to wildlife, it is much higher than wildlife. In 2014, the
rate
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 of wildlife was 5
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percent
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 lower than
three
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years
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 of health and in 2013 and 2012 did not have
more
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a greater
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 disproportion
with
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 3 and 4
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percent
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respectively
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. Arts in 2012 and 2013 had the same
rate
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with
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, with
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 3
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percent
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and
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, and
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 in 2014
was
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it was
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 the highest
with
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, with
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 4
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percent
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per cent
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words six, three, years, percent, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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