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Band 1.5

In many cities,planners tend to arrange shops,schools,offices,and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other . Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh its disadvantages for city residents?

In the
last
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century
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this
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 type of building started to
appearing
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 increasingly , but
i
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 believe that
it's have
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 so many negative effects.
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 for some people who are working in shops or offices, in their break time, they usually
goes
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for
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 the nearest shops
,
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 to get a coffee or food, and
this
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 may boost their performance
while
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 working. And
also
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it's
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 has an effect on families with children because it will take
sometime
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in
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 the road to reach school and that will
rise
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 so many
thing
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 like
,
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apply
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 traffic
jam
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 and
by
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that
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accident
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. In
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conclude
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 separate areas have so many disadvantages, and it's can have more or less by the
circumstance
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circumstances
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, population, common traffic, etc

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. Be direct about whether you think advantages outweigh disadvantages or not.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your points in a clearer way. Use paragraphs for each main idea.
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Use specific examples to support your points more strongly. For instance, add details about how traffic jams happen or why coffee breaks help.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and sentence structure to avoid errors like 'it's have' instead of 'it has' and 'goes' instead of 'go'.
task achievement
You clearly identified some disadvantages of separating areas.
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You provided a relevant example about workers seeking nearby shops during breaks.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • time and cost savings
  • traffic congestion
  • community
  • diversity
  • options
  • commute times
  • overcrowding
  • local businesses
  • negative impact
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • residents
  • planners
  • shops
  • schools
  • offices
  • homes
  • specific areas
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