Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some individuals tend to stay in their safe zone and continue their
lives
steadily. While
other people
are always welcoming changes and challenges to get more advantages from their lives
.
To begin
with, the type of people
who like to have routine work have many troubles in various aspects of their lives
. Because they avoid being changed in each part of their lives
and they are not experienced well in dealing with challenges. Hence
, they always depend on other people
. In addition
, their lives
become boring and they do not have exciting issues to get involved with them. Although
this
lifestyle works in some situations, this
method of life is not flexible at any time. For example
, having a constant and routine job in a company is not acceptable for a long time. Because every person needs to improve their skills until they have enough.
In contrast
, some people
think that change is always good for their fortune. In other words
, being out of their comfort zone provides many opportunities for them to improve their characteristics and learn many topics from their mistakes. This
can lead to taking a risk and making a decision independently. Moreover
, this
lifestyle is full of exploration and discovery for those people
who want to learn new challenges. As a matter of fact, changing is a kind of training to fight our fears and be prepared for unknown conditions.
To conclude
, Some individuals prefer to devote their lives
to doing the same stuff and avoid any changes, whereas
others like to face change continuously.Submitted by brightstargalaxy on
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