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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem?

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revolution
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industry
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apply
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, the amount of food
who
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that
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are been
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 produced has increased over the demand, and that
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due
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 to special events like
,
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 parties, festivals, etc.
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andi
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and
believe
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 we should make a balance, and make an institution for aware people more and more about
that
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 value of
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foods
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food
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, and how to use it in moderation. There
are
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 no doubt
,
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 that by
moderate
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 the use of
foods
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, we will see an immediate impact
,
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for
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their
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there
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 was a study
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that showed
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 that most
of
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crimes
happend
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happened
 because of poverty, and
bulid
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based
 on
that
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that,
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 we can reach to conclusion that crimes and
foods
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 are related to each other. And
also
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, by guaranteed the right of
foods
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, more people with talent will appear, and we can notice that by looking at country like india,
for instance
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 after offering a good
foods
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 and the daily needs for indian people, our progress in science start to blow up, and we can look at
this
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, we must spread more awareness about
this
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 topic
and
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, and
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 it will
effect
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affect
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 the future generations, and if we
did
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 it, we will have to
primary
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make primary
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 changes, our development in
majors
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major
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 subjects will increase,
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secondly
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secondly,
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 we will be able to consume other resources from other planets.

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coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
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content
You raised important issues about food waste and its impact on society.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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