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In many countries, international tourism has become an important source of income. However, it also has negative effects. Do the benefits of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent
year
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, the
intrest
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interest
 of
indiviuals
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individuals
 in exploring
diffrent
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different
 countries has increased, which
generate
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 jobs and money for locals. Many inhabitants advocate
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due to
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 its various
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potential
benefits
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, others remain
skeptical
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, citing some possible drawbacks. In
this
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 essay, I will elaborate on both
perspectivies
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perspectives
 and
its
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their
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overall
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 impact on
scoeity
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society
. To commence with, there are
myriad
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 of
benefits
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are
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associated with
this
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 trend. The cardinal one is that it
hepls
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helps
 to push the economy of
nation
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the nation
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. To make it clear, as long as
tourisits
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tourists
will
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explore the areas, more business will be
genereated
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generated
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, which not only leads to
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generating
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 more jobs, but
also
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 improves the infrastructure of
city
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the city
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. An even more significant fact is that
while
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 travelling to
another
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other
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 countries people have to exchange
currencey
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currency
, which
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also
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is also
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a
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 important source of income.
Therefore
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,
however
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, despite some aforementioned
benefits
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, there are some considerable drawbacks which cannot be overlooked.
Firstly
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, pollution is one of the most prevalent
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problems
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.
In addition
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 to it, at tourist
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places
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place
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place,
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 the traffic jam is normal
which
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, which
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 contributes to sound pollution and air pollution as well.
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, popular destinations are overcrowded, making
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difficulat
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difficult
 for both
tourisits
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tourists
 and residents to enjoy the area.
To sum up
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,
although
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 it helps to
gererate
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generate
 revenue and brings economic
benifits
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benefits
,
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also
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it also
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posses
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harmful
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a harmful
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 impact
to
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on
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the enviourment
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enviourment
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environment
.
Nevertheless
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, the
benefits
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 of
discussed
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the discussed
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 matter
has
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far exceed its demerits.

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language
Make sure to correct spelling mistakes such as 'intrest', 'diffrent', 'indiviuuals', 'potentinal', 'scoeity', 'hepls', 'generated', 'currencey', 'gererate', and 'benifits'.
content
Try to give more specific examples to support your points, such as mentioning a country that benefits from tourism or a specific pollution issue.
coherence
Improve the flow of ideas. Use linking words such as 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to guide the reader through your argument.
task achievement
Make sure your conclusion clearly summarizes your stance. State whether you think the benefits really outweigh the negatives without hesitation.
content
You have a clear structure with an introduction, discussion of both sides, and a conclusion.
task achievement
You identify both the benefits and drawbacks of international tourism, showing balanced thinking.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Revenue
  • Accommodation
  • Cultural exchange
  • Infrastructure
  • Pollution
  • Erosion
  • Overcrowding
  • Economic dependency
  • Global events
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Mutual understanding
  • Strain on natural resources
  • Foot traffic
  • Local traditions and customs
  • Cultural awareness
  • Vulnerable
  • Pandemics
  • Political instability
  • Residue
  • Host country
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