Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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would argue that Popular adults and children should be followed wherever they go so their fans know what they do,
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others say that
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is a bad behaviour and it should be considered illegal
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I believe
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should be banned by the government because it violates other
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's privacy. Human beings would like to hear about their favourite actors or players, it gives them an overview of the life of rich
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and how they spend their leisure time celebrating in fancy restaurants or near their private pool with expensive wine , their lifestyle is quite interesting with all the great clothes and shoes they have .
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, Oxford University reported that news about famous
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is getting viral more than 70% of the other news in the past decade. Famous
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have many drawbacks in their lives that we cannot see or feel because they do not talk about them. After all, they are humans and they deserve to live like normal persons, they do not have the space to be free from the flashes of the cameras that follows them everywhere,For instane, princess diana had never exit her home to buy some coffee without photographers stocking her at the street, and
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demonstrate the importance of privacy . In conclusion,despite that we all have some interest in wealthy
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's daily routine, that does not give the green light to all of the bad behaviour photographers do, and we should be stopping them , not encouraging them to do more.

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Try to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and rephrase it in the conclusion.
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Use transition words like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' to help the reader follow your ideas better.
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Add more specific examples or details to support your ideas about privacy and famous people.
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You presented a clear opinion in the essay.
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You included relevant points about the interest in famous people and the importance of privacy.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Celebrity status
  • Public interest
  • Invasion of privacy
  • Mental health impact
  • Media scrutiny
  • Personal freedom
  • Ethical considerations
  • Public figure
  • Consent
  • Balance
  • Surveillance
  • Unwanted photography
  • Admiration
  • Inspiration
  • Intrusive
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