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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

A company has asked for permission from the local Council to built a factory in your area. Write a letter to the local Council stating that you and your neighbours think this is a bad idea. State what problem this might cause Explain where the factory should be constructed Explain what you want the Council to Do

A company has asked for permission from the local Council to
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 a factory in your area. Write a letter to the local Council stating that you and your neighbours think
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 is a bad idea. State what problem
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 might cause
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 where the factory should be constructed
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. Explain
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 what you want the Council to
Do
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Make sure to clearly introduce the problem and include specific examples of the issues the factory might cause.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your paragraphs better to make it easier to follow your ideas. Each paragraph should focus on one main point.
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Use a friendly and formal tone throughout the letter. This will help in making your point more effectively.
structure
The letter includes a greeting and closing, which is good for a formal letter.
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You have shown concern for the community, which is important for this type of letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • permission
  • local Council
  • factory
  • community
  • problems
  • solution
  • noise pollution
  • quality of life
  • traffic congestion
  • safety risks
  • environmental impacts
  • contamination
  • wildlife
  • health standards
  • property values
  • industrial zone
  • residential areas
  • sustainable development
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