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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Some people say that shops should sell food products from the local area whenever possible, rather than selling food that has been imported from other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals believe that markets should sell
nutritions
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nutritional
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products
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 from local investors if
it
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apply
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possible, rather than imported
food
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products
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 from other
countries
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.
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,
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 and I strongly support
this
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 view. In
this
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 essay, I will delineate my reasons, supported by relevant examples.
To begin
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, the main reason why I believe that supermarkets should give
the
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apply
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priority to
a
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apply
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local
food
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 suppliers because it will improve economic growth in
country
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the country
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, which leads to
increase
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an increase
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purchasing
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in purchasing
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 power for the population.
According to
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 a study conducted in the UK revealed that 75
percent
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per cent
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out off
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of
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 800
person
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people
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will
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would
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 prefer
a
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apply
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local nutrition rather than imported ones, because they believe that local
food
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products
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more
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are
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clean
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cleaner
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 and
fresh
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fresher
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. On
other
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the other
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 hand, many people
passion
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are passionate
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in
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about
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 trying new foods,
flavors
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flavours
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 that are not available in their
countries
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and
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, and
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 they can not travel to live the experience of trying
food
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products
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 in
original
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their original
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 taste .
For instance
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, many
countries
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 like Saudi Arabia import macha from Japan, because no local
food
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 companies produce
same
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the same
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qualities
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quality
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like
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as
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Japanies
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Japanese
companies
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companies,
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 as shown in
survey
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a survey
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done
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conducted
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between
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among
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Saudies
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Saudis
 in 2024.
To sum up
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, local
food
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 can enhance
foster
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and foster
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buyer
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buyers
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which
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, which
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 results in
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countries
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the country's
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 growth.
However
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, some local
nutritions
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nutritionists
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 do not have
same
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the same
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 quality as original
products
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.
In
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From
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 my point of view,
i
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I
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 agree with
market
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the market
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 selling local
food
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products
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 as much as they can, with
import
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imported
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products
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 that do not have
same
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the same
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 alternatives in some standard. And
motivat
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motivate
 local
food
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 companies to improve their
products
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 and services so they can produce more
products
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 to increase
consumption
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the consumption
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 of local foods.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion and outlines your main points. A clear thesis will help guide your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas and make your essay flow better. This will make it easier for the reader to follow your thoughts.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and details to support your points. This will make your arguments stronger and more convincing.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion on the topic and you express it in your introduction.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • locally-produced food
  • imported food
  • community's economy
  • carbon emissions
  • environmental footprint
  • supply chain
  • self-sufficient
  • global supply chain disruptions
  • nutritional content
  • culinary traditions
  • preservation
  • employment levels
  • traditional farming practices
  • freshness
  • quality
  • transportation
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