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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summarize the information and report the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summarize the information and report the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate the changes and the new features of a
bookstore
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following
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 its development between 2000 and the present.
Overall
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,
The
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bookstore
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 has been changed in
the
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order of some sections and adds other new features. And the removal of some sections .
Initially
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, there was no change in the entrance, travel
section
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, new books and service desk places as we enter the
bookstore
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, the fiction
section
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 has been reduced and adds the cookery and art
section
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 next to it.
In
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 the right side of the fiction
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section
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 it changed to be the new
section
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 for non-fiction books .
On the other hand
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, there were new features in the
bookstore
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Cafe
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The Cafe
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 was placed in the old place of the non-fiction
section
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 next to the service desk.
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Likewise
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 a table had been added in front of the cafe in the previous place of hobbies, cookery and art books . The hobbies
section
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 was deleted from the
bookstore
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bookstore, section with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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