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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a areport for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a areport for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The line chart illustrates the comparison of the difference in
wheat
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exports
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 in Australia,
Canada
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, and
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European
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 Community over a period of 5 years, from 1985 to 1990. It can
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 that there was a gradual growth in
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 of tonnes in
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, and
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the European
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 Community, and
the
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 data of
wheat
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exports
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 in Australia of gradual decrease. Looking at the chart closely, one can see that there was a rapid decline in the
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quantity
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 of
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exports
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 in
Canada
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 and
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 during the period between 1985 and 1986, from 19
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millions
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of
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tonnes to 17
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for
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tonnes for
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Canada
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, and
17
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to
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million to
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 14
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for
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tonnes for
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European
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the European
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 Community. During the period from 1986 to 1990, there was a swift increase in
wheat
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exports
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 from 14
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millions
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million
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 to 21
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millions
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. Between 1986 to 1988, the
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exports
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decrease
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 from 17
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million
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 to 25
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millions
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. From 1988 to 1989, there was a rapid drop in the figure of the
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exports
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, from 25
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million
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 to 14
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millions
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. The
wheat
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exports
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 witnessed an
increased
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 between 1989 and 1990, from 14
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millions
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million
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 to 19
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millions
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. In terms of the
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amount
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 of
wheat
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exports
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 in Australia rose between 1985 and 1986, from 15
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millions
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million
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 to 16
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millions
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million
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. From 1986 to 1990, the
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 of tonnes
in
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of
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wheat
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exports
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 experienced a decrease from 16
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millions
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million
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 to 11
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millions
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.

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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, exports, canada, european, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wheat exports
  • trend
  • significant increases
  • significant decreases
  • fluctuations
  • periods of stability
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • similarities
  • differences
  • key points
  • potential reasons
  • climatic conditions
  • agricultural policies
  • market demand
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