Some people think that the teenage years are happinest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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my personal opinion .
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age you do not have many responsibilities.
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usually you had many friends . soo your social
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many other benefits how
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believe
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believe that because more you grow more mature you are .
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you see the world in another way .
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a teenager
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a family , or other responsibilities
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and many other things that you can not make .
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benefit so they can relax .
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you will have a job .
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. soo i will say that the first opinion is the most likely to me

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion at the end.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use linking words like 'firstly,' 'however,' and 'finally' to connect your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar to help your ideas be clearer
task achievement
You have made an effort to discuss both views, which is good for task achievement.

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