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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
rates
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 of
divorce
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 in
Finland
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 and
Sweden
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 in the period from 2011 to 2015.
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, the
divorce
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rates
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 in both countries experienced some changes, illustrating opposite trends, with
rates
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 in
Finland
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 increasing over time, and in
Sweden
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decreasing. At the beginning of the period, there was a slight discrepancy in the
rates
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 between
two
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 countries, with Finnish people ending their marriage with
divorce
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 with approximately 37% probability, and Swedish citizens in 45% of situations. Next year, the gap widened: slightly more than
one third
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 of marriages in
Finland
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 drifted away,
whereas
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 the figure in
Sweden
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achieved
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 almost 50%.
This
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 was the turning point in the trend of
divorce
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rates
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: starting
with
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in
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 2013, the percentage began to grow in
Finlanf
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Finland
 year by year, and gradually decline in
Sweden
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. Interestingly, in 2015,
Finland
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 overtook
Sweden
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 by the
divorce
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 rate, having 4 in 10 families broken up,
whereas
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 the figure in
Sweden
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 dropped lower than 40% for the first time in the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, divorce, finland, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce
  • rate
  • country
  • year
  • show
  • change
  • increase
  • decrease
  • higher
  • lower
  • trend
  • comparison
  • data
  • overall
  • feature
  • attitude
  • peaks
  • fluctuation
  • years
  • society
  • European
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