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The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest consumer spending on travel in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest consumer spending on travel in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information concerning the
most
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countries that pay for
traveling
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travelling
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 in 2014. The data can be
categorized
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categorised
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 into China, USA, Germany, UK, Singapore, South Korea, Hong Kong, India, Malaysia and Taiwan. Units are measured
as
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in
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billion
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dollars
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.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that China spend
most
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 money
for
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on
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traveling
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travelling
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 compared with other countries and only one that
spend
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spends
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 more than 100
billion
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dollars
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. USA and Germany
had
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as well as
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 the figure. Only India, Malaysia and Taiwan had
the
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figure
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figures
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 lower than 20
billion
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dollars
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.
To begin
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 with, China was
only
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countries
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country
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 that
spending
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spent
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 over 100
billion
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dollars
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, at approximately 110
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billions
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billion
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. Moving to
United
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the United
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State
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 and Germany
were
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was
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 85
billion
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dollars
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while
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United
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 Kingdom was slightly lower
from
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than
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 them, at around 58
billion
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dollars
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.
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Lastly
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 the amount of expenditures that
more
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was more
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20
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than 20
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dollars
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 was Singapore
which
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 was 22
billion
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dollars
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.
On the other hand
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, South
Korean
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Korea
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 and Hong Kong were spending the same value ,at 20
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billions
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billion
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.
Therefore
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, India and Malaysia were lower than 20
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billions
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billion
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which
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, which
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 were 14 and 10
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billions
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billion
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, respectively. The lowest consumer spending on
traveling
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travelling
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 was
Taiwan
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in Taiwan
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 , which was approximately 8
billion
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dollars
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 in that year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, dollars, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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