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The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts provide data regarding changes in
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world
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population
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 in different regions from 1900 to 2000.
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,
it is clear that
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 the number of
people
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 in the
world
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 increased significantly. It is
also
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 evident that by far the most populated regions were
Asia
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 and Europe. Focusing first on the areas with the highest percentage of citizens, in 1900, 60% of
people
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 resided in
Asia
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, which was over twice the percentage of citizens in Europe (including Russia).
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, by 2000, slightly more than half of the
world
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population
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 lived in
Asia
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 Pacific (including former Soviet
Asia
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). Regarding Europe, the proportion for
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 region decreased significantly, to only 14%. As for the less populated regions, at the beginning of the period, between 3% to 5% lived in North America, Africa, Latin America, and
others
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other
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regions, which
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 accounted for 15% of the total
world
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population
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. In 2000, the proportion of
people
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 living there almost doubled, to more than 30%. Notably, the
world
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population
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 over
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 period rose dramatically, from 1.6 to 6 billion
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people
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population, people, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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