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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

It is argued by many that the current
time
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 is the best to live in. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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 statement
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 the convenience in today's lifestyle, and the
last
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 century would be interesting to live in because of the rapid development that occurred during it. There is many benefit of living in the current
time
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 that many
people
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 don't value and prefer to live in the past, many inventions made our live easier and saved us a lot of
time
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 and effort,
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 as smartphones,
people
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 in the past had to sent letters for each others that would take several months to arrive for it's destinations,
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, now you can text somebody and they will recieve your massege in seconds. Another
time
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 some are interested in living in is the
last
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 centurey, which witness some significant development in several aspects,including the advancement in the medical sector and the improvement in the healthcare services,before that
people
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 were dying from even small health conditions,
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 as fever,and in the past several decades society started to enhance their living circumstances and invest in researches for the medical sector to develop their nations,
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, in the UK death rates in hospitals decreased 23% compared to the
last
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 centurey. In conclusion, in today's world , individuals have convenient living circumstances compared to the past ones, when
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 faced many problems in different aspects,and the most significant
time
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 in history is considered to be the
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 century
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 the significant developments.

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language
Work on grammar and spelling. Many mistakes are in the essay. Check subject-verb and noun forms, and use the right past tense where needed.
organization
Make ideas clear in each paragraph. Start with a main idea and add one or two small points to explain it.
style
Use more simple but correct phrases. Do not mix long ideas in one sentence. Short, clear sentences help meaning.
content
Try to give real and accurate examples. If you cite a fact, make sure it is likely true, or avoid too strong claims.
content strength
The writer gives a clear opinion at the start.
content strength
The essay tries to answer both parts of the task.
structure strength
There is a basic structure with an intro, body, and ending.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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