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The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014

The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014
The provided line graph shows the average house
prices
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 in three different
countries
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, labelled as
Country
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 A,
Country
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 B, and
Country
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 C, from 1997 to 2014. The
prices
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 are measured in thousands of
dollars
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.
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, all three
countries
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 saw an upward trend in average house
prices
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 over the
period
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, despite some fluctuations.
Country
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 A had the highest
prices
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 throughout the
period
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,
while
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Country
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 C consistently had the lowest. The most significant price changes for all
countries
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 occurred between 1997 and 2008.
Country
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 A's average house
prices
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 began at just under 200
thousand
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dollars
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 in 1997.
Prices
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 rose steadily, reaching a peak of around 540
thousand
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dollars
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 in 2004.
Following
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, there was a slight decrease to approximately 450
thousand
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dollars
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 by 2007. From 2009 to 2014, the price gradually increased, finishing the
period
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 at around 745
thousand
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dollars
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.
Country
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 B started with approximately 150
thousand
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dollars
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 in 1997. The
prices
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 gradually increased, reaching a peak of just over 300
thousand
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dollars
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 in 2004.
After
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this
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 peak, the
prices
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 plummeted above 250
thousand
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dollars
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 by 2008. From 2008 to 2009, the price plunged to 500
thousand
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dollars
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,
then
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 it rose steadily, finishing the
period
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 at around 490
thousand
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dollars
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.
Country
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 C
prices
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 were the lowest among the three
countries
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, starting at about 140
thousand
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dollars
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 in 1997. The
prices
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 gradually rose until 2007, under 250
thousand
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dollars
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.
Then
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,
this
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 figure from 2007 to 2009
,
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 dropped suddenly to around 135
thousand
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dollars
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 and climbed sharply above 250
thousand
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dollars
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. Respectfully,
this
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 number was steady until 2014.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, countries, country, dollars, period, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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