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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent do you agree?

When people travel to foreign countries, there is often debate about whether they should adapt to local
customs
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 or continue with their own cultural practices.
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 I believe visitors should
respect
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 the traditions of the host country, full adaptation may not always be necessary. Adapting to local
customs
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 is important for several reasons.
Firstly
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, it shows
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 towards the host community and helps avoid misunderstandings.
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, dressing modestly in conservative societies or observing dining etiquette in Asian cultures demonstrates cultural sensitivity.
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, adapting enables deeper cultural experiences. Travellers who embrace local food, language, and festivals often gain a richer understanding of the society than those who isolate themselves.
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,
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 efforts foster positive relationships between locals and visitors, reducing cultural barriers.
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, it is not always realistic or fair to expect complete adaptation. Some
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 may conflict with an individual’s personal beliefs, health, or religion.
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, a vegetarian may find it difficult to participate fully in a culture where meat consumption is central.
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, short-term tourists cannot be expected to learn and adopt every cultural practice within a limited time. In
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 cases, showing basic courtesy and avoiding offensive behaviour may be sufficient. In my view, travellers should make reasonable efforts to
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 and adapt to local practices, especially in public spaces, but they do not need to abandon their own identity. A balanced approach—respecting local culture
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 maintaining personal values—ensures harmony and mutual appreciation. In conclusion, adapting to local
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 is essential to some extent, but flexibility and mutual
respect
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 are more important than total conformity.

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The essay has a clear view and balance. Try to add one strong idea in each paragraph to connect to your main point.
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Use simple linking words to show flow from one idea to the next.
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In the start, state your main idea in a clear sentence and restate it in the end.
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A fair view with both sides shown.
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Good real-life examples to show how people adapt.
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Clear shape: introduction, body, and conclusion.
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