The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010

The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010
the
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graph shows
number
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the number
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of overweight
australians
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Australian
men and
women
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,during
period
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the period
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of 30
year
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years
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from 1980 to 2010. It is clear from the graph that
thhe
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the
number of
overwiethg
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overweight
men was higher than the data for
women
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.
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while
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the figures for
women
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went up gradually over
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the periodfrom
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periodfrom
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period from
1980 to 2010. Males' data increased slightly from 40% to 65% units between 1980 to 2000
then
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went down over 10 follwing year.
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Moreover
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during the
preiod
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period
from 19980 to 2000,there was a steady rise in the figure of overweight
lady like
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ladies
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from 31 to 53
percent
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per cent
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. .then
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.
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Then
then
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the
digit
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number
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of
women
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seems to
keep
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remain
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unchagned
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unchanged
between 2000 and 2010 in
nummber
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numbers
over
a
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apply
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50 per cent

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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