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The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010

The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010
The bar chart illustrates the comparison of the percentage of males and females who were overweight in Australia over a period of 30 years, from 1980 to 2010. It can be seen that there was a gradual
increase
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 the number of females who were overweight in Australia and the upheaval of men. In general, the percentage in the chart, men is higher than for women. Looking at the chart closely, one can see that there was a significant
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 in the data of the overweight of males in Australia during the period from 1980 to 2000, there was an
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 from 40% to 65%. From 2000 to 2010, there was a decrease in the overweight rate of males from 65% to 60%. In terms of the digit of the overweight females during the period from 1980 to 2010, there was a slight
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 from 30% to 51%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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