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The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030.

The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030.
The line graph presents
percentage
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the percentage
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 of the oil
consuption
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consumption
 for
four
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the four
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 major consumers between the years from 2009 to 2030.
Overall
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,
according to
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 the line graph above,
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the USA
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USA
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USA's
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consuming
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consumption
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 of oil
recording
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recorded
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 the highest
level
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of
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among
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 all the fourth countries, since the
year
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 of 2009
till
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to
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 2030
,
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.
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 The other consumers
went
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remained
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in
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at
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 the same
level
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 of
consuming
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consumption
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. stacking on the same
pattren
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pattern
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Due to
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 graph , The three liners of Middel East and China and Western Europe and Japan, in 2009 they started from down 4
M
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barrels
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 per
day
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 , untill the
year
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 of 2025 China liner's had a peak, and the other two liners went down ,till the
year
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 of 2030 the three linrs stick to the same
level
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 whic is between 4 and 2
M
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barrels
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 per
day
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. In
contract
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contrast
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,
USA linr's
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USA's
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stick
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sticks
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 to the highest levels ,
started
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starting
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 from 10
M
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barrels
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 per
day
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 in 2009 , and decreased in
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year
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apply
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2025 to 8
M
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barrels
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 per
day
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 , scoring the lowest
level
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 of
consume
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consumption
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 till the
year
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 of 2030.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words level, year, m, barrels, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • oil
  • consumption
  • total
  • use
  • country
  • year
  • 2009
  • 2030
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • go up
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • stay the same
  • remain
  • high
  • highest
  • low
  • lowest
  • big
  • large
  • small
  • difference
  • gap
  • trend
  • pattern
  • compare
  • compared with
  • in comparison with
  • lead
  • leader
  • by
  • in
  • from
  • to
  • by 2030
  • in 2009
  • more
  • most
  • less
  • least
  • upward
  • downward
  • steady
  • stable
  • peak
  • level off
  • economy
  • population
  • policy
  • technology
  • price
  • supply
  • environment
  • future
  • coming years
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