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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
The line graph illustrates how many
enquiries
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 were received in the Tourist Information Office by three types, including direct,
letter
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 or
email
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 and
telephone
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in
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, in
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 a city between
January
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 and
June
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 in 2011.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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while
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 the number of
enquiries
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 by in-person and
telephone
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 increased, the opposite was true for
letter
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 and
email
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. It is
also
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 notable that direct
enquiries
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 significantly rise and reach a high of
enquiries
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 in
June
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. In
January
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, the number of
enquiries
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 by in-person hit a low of nearly 400. Over the following three months, it became the most popular
enquires
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enquiries
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, overtaking
telephone
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,
letter
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 and
email
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. After that, it witnessed a considerable rise to about 2000
enquires
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enquiries
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 consistently. The figure for
telephone
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enquiries
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also
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 increased to 1600 in
June
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. Looking at the other types, the number of
enquires
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enquiries
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 by
letter
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 and
email
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 considerably fell from 800 at the second type in
January
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 to a low of 400 in
June
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. Some minor fluctuations around 200 in the first three months, starting in
January
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 and a significant decrease in April and
June
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries, letter, email, telephone, january, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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