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The maps below show a bookstore in 200 and now

The maps below show a bookstore in 200 and now
The maps
illustrates
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
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 the developments which took
place
Use synonyms
 in
bookstore
Correct article usage
the bookstore
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 between 2000 and now.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 some new
facilities
Punctuation problem
facilities,
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 that tables and a cafe, have been added. Almost all
exiting
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existing
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 facilities have been relocated during that time.
While
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 the new books section and service desk have remained relatively stable. The access to the reading
place
Use synonyms
 was from
South
Correct article usage
the South
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,
although
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 the New books and Service Desk have remained
,
Punctuation problem
.
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 A new cafe
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 been replaced by Non-
fiction
Use synonyms
 over the period. Turning to the left side of the entrance,
Fiction
Use synonyms
place
Use synonyms
 is located in the right corner of the entrance has
reduced
Correct article usage
a reduced
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 size
, after
Punctuation problem
. After
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 that
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this
Punctuation problem
, this
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place
Use synonyms
divided
Verb problem
is divided
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 into four areas, including Art, Hobbies, Cookery and
Fiction
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.
Furthermore
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, there is a Travel, near which
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 Tables.
By contrast
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, the Hobbies section has been demolished,
a
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and a
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table with four chairs now occupies that space.
Additionally
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, the second
fiction
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 space in the left corner of the bookstore, next to the other
fiction
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 area, has been transformed into a non-
fiction
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.
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space.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place, fiction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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