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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

It is frequently contended that people tend to consume news online rather than buy printed newspapers or
books
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. I mostly agree with
this
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 the reason will be
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 as follows. On the one hand, online platforms offer more instant, abundant and free
information
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.
That is
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, printed
books
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 or newspapers demand time to print and delivery,
while
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 people can obtain news instantly through their mobile devices.
For example
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, people used to subscribe to magazines to follow the trend;
however
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, nowadays, they just open their social media and know what is the latest popular.
Secondly
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, accessing
information
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 from the
internet
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 means that individuals do not need to worry about the storage of these materials.
By contrast
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, the original form of
newspaper
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 and
books
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rely
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relies
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 on a huge space to store.
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 it is evident that access to
information
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 online
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provides a wide range of advantages, there are some drawbacks that
could not
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 be neglected.
On the other hand
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, not everyone has an easily accessible
internet
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, especially for those who live in rural areas or low-income families.
In other words
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, printed
books
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 may be a more suitable option for them because online
information
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 is dependent on stable and high-speed
internet
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.
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, having too much screen time can lead to serious health problems,
such
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short sight
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 and dizziness.
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, the existence of printed newspapers and
books
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are
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is
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 significant and necessary in some cases. In conclusion,
while
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recognize
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recognise
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 the drawbacks of consuming
information
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 through the
internet
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. I believe that getting
information
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 online is more beneficial in the long run
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 convenience and immediacy.

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structure
Plan first: write a short intro that says your view, two body parts for main ideas, and a short end that restates.
structure
Start each paragraph with a topic sentence that states the point you will make.
content
Give clear examples that fit the point and show why it matters.
coherence
Link ideas with good joins like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'in addition' to move from one idea to the next.
accuracy
Check grammar; keep sentences short and clear.
content
The text shows a clear view on online reading.
structure
Par of idea is split in to two parts and ends with a short conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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