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Some people argue that governments should provide free university education for all citizens. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this policy?

It is argued by some that higher
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 should be provided free of charge by the government for all domestic students.
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 statement because it would provide graduates with better career opportunities and lead to national economic prosperity.
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, offering free undergraduate and postgraduate
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 contributes to improving the living standards of citizens.
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 to say, if university is free, more people will choose to pursue higher
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 without having to worry about the significant expenses.
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 means a larger portion of the population can become qualified professionals like doctors, engineers, and dentists,
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 are jobs that offer higher incomes than those available to secondary school graduates.
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, countries like Germany that offer free tuition have a highly skilled workforce and
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 middle class, as citizens can access high-paying professions without starting their careers in debt. Another reason tuition-free university
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 should be implemented is that a highly educated population attracts foreign investment.
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, the more graduates a country produces, the more appealing it becomes to multinational corporations.
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 happens because it is often more beneficial for a company to build a local branch using skilled domestic workers rather than exporting its products. These new branches require competent, well-educated employees to run them, which leads to more job opportunities and an increase in the country's tax revenues.
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, China's focus on educating a vast number of engineers made it a prime location for tech companies to open facilities, which has been a key factor in its growth into the world's second-largest economy. In conclusion, I agree that the government should support its citizens to pursue higher
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 without fees, as
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 plays a significant role in growing the national economy and enhancing the living standards of the population.

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improvement
Add one more point on a possible cost or downside of free tuition to show depth.
coherence
Use simple linking phrases like 'for example' and 'in addition' to help flow between ideas.
content
Keep examples brief and tied to your point, one example per paragraph.
task response
You state a clear view and keep it through the essay.
coherence
You provide real examples (Germany and China) to back your point.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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