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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that
professionals
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,
such
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 as doctors and
engineers
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, should
work
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 for the
country
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 where they did their training,
while
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 others think that they are allowed to
work
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 in any other
country
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 where they wish. In my opinion, I think that working for the local
country
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 will be more valuable to the nation,
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 there are some benefits of working in foreign countries. On the one hand, some people believe that
professionals
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 should be free to
work
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 as they wish.
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 is because they can gain foreign
work
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 experience, which is more valuable
to achieve
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 long-term success.
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, the salary range for skilled workers in other countries is higher, which leads them to get a higher salary by working there.
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, most
engineers
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 from Myanmar usually
work
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 in Singapore because they can get a great salary, which allows them to support their families' needs.
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, people may gain skilled experience and a great income by working in a foreign
country
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.
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, others think that there are many advantages of having many doctors and
engineers
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 in the local
country
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.
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, they can contribute what they have learned to students or learners at medical or engineering schools. It is really important to cultivate skilled workers who can support
work
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 for the
country
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 to
fulfill
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 the requirements
in
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of
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 the local
country
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.
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, experienced doctors are needed in many hospitals to save lives.
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,
engineers
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 are
also
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 essential to develop the transportation systems or infrastructures in a
country
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.
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,
professionals
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 play a crucial role in developing living standards and modern countries.
To conclude
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, it is true that there are many benefits that can be contributed to skilled workers by working abroad.
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, I believe that a
country
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 requires many
professionals
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 because their skills contribute many benefits to society and the
country
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's development.

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task
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep the same idea through the essay. Give more detail for each view to show balance.
coherence
Use clear links between ideas. Simple words like and, but, also, for example help readers follow your thought.
grammar
Break long lines into shorter ones. Use short sentences with one idea each.
lexis
Use common words from the top 100. Some words like 'infrastructure' or 'cultivate' are hard. Try plain words like 'roads', 'buildings', 'grow'.
structure
Finish with a short end that restates your view and sums up the reason from both sides.
stance
Your stance is clear and you discuss both sides.
structure
The essay is in clear paragraphs with a general flow.
example
You give a real life example to back a point.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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