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Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

Access to clean
water
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 is widely recognised as a basic human right. Some people argue that, because of
this
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, every household should be provided with a free
water
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 supply. I partly agree with
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 view, as
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 free access to
water
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 is essential for survival, a completely free household supply may not be practical or sustainable. On
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 hand,
water
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 is fundamental to human life. Without it, people cannot drink safely, cook, or maintain basic hygiene. Providing at least a minimum daily amount of
water
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 free of charge would ensure that no family is deprived of
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 necessity
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 financial hardship.
For example
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, in some rural areas of Thailand, the government has implemented community
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 supply projects to provide safe and affordable
water
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 to villages that previously relied on rivers or wells.
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, in Bangkok, the Metropolitan Waterworks Authority offers subsidised
water
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 rates for low-income households to ensure that everyone has access to clean tap
water
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. Both initiatives help protect vulnerable communities
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 promoting health and equality.
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, supplying unlimited
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 free of charge could create serious challenges.
Water
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 treatment, storage, and distribution involve significant costs, and governments rely on fees to maintain infrastructure. If
water
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 were entirely free, it might encourage waste, leading to shortages, especially in regions prone to drought or seasonal
water
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 shortages,
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 as the Northeast region of Thailand. In conclusion, I believe that every household should receive a basic amount of
water
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 free to meet essential needs.
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, usage beyond that should be paid for to ensure sustainability and encourage responsible consumption.

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task
State your view clearly in the first line and keep it in the rest of the essay.
coherence
Make ideas flow in a clear order. Use simple link words like and, but, so, for example to join ideas.
coherence
Give more than one example and show how each backs your point.
language
Check small grammar and keep long sentences short.
language
Use common words and plain phrases to avoid marks for word choice.
strength
Clear view kept from start to end
strength
Good use of real place as example
strength
Strong closing line that restates the view
Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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